Thanks, MTUCache.
On the short sentences, you should have seen the first draft I sent to the publisher. Many short sentences. Many. (There, I did it right there.)
The editors made some of the sentences longer and more "novel-y" as I call it. But not all of them. They kept my writing style my own.
Remember: I don't read fiction so I had no idea how it was supposed to sound.
On the guns thing, I hear you. I go into "shopping list" detail in Book One. But wait until Book Three. Many wives and girlfriends who wonder about this Lisa character will see themselves in Book Three and they'll like what they see in Lisa.
Thanks for your thoughtful post.